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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on it? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages. Explain your choice by using specific reasons and details.

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Nowadays, children spent more hours in front of
computers
. Over the past two decades, it becomes a crucial part of everyone's life. I personally believe that using
computers
 at a younger
age
 has more drawbacks than benefits.
This
 essay will discuss both advantages and disadvantages in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
 with, children use
computers
 at the
age
 of 4-5 years. They learn technology at a younger
age
 which helps them to learn more things.
For instance
, a survey conducted by Newyork city found that pupils who have their own computer are more intelligent than those who have not.
This
 is
also
 noticed that they gain 20-26% more grades than others. Computer helps them to clear concepts and easy understanding.
On the other hand
, I think that there are more drawbacks to using
computers
 at a younger
age
.
Firstly
, they have some health issues
such
 as obesity, and eyesight shortness. They spend longer own
computers
 and they suffer from health problems.
Secondly
, they become introverted, and they do not like to become social people which is not good for their personality.
Moreover
, they lack confidence and do not participate in any activities at school.
In addition
, students watch things which are not good for their
age
such
 as violent cartoon characters. To conclude, in my opinion, computer knowledge is important to each and every pupil but at a younger
age
, I think that it has more cons than pros.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological fluency
  • Educational development
  • Critical-thinking skills
  • Physical activity
  • Inappropriate content
  • Social skill development
  • Addiction
  • Cognitive abilities
  • Multitasking
  • Digital literacy
  • Screen time
  • Digital divide
  • Online safety
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomics
  • Parental controls
  • Child-proofing
  • Interactive learning
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