A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called “The book that influence me most. In your letter Describe what this book was about Explain how this book influenced you Say whether this book be likely to influence other people Write at least 150 words.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to inform you that recently I read a
book
“autobiography of Bill Gates” which explains
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details of
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Bill Gates’s life and struggles he did from
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childhood till date. As I understood, the magazine
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published by you wants to include
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from the
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read and motivated to readers presently. One of the
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from the
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can be published as an article which explains
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“academic study and intelligence”. The
book
describes
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Mr.
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Gates
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schooling, his interest in
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computers
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and
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for
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technology during
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his academic
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years. During practical
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in
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, he used to spend a lot of
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to gain
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in-depth knowledge of computer programming and information technology. At one point
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time, he
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dropped out
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school due to poor performance in various subjects, from
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he built his empire and became
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man
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the planet. In
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competitive world, parents
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anything to their children for study, without trying to understand the core interest of
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student
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,
this
point has
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my mind and
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. I am damp sure that the
book
will be definitely liked by all readers. I will draft and send
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to you through email on
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email ID for
further
review and final approval before publishing
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magazine
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. I look forward to
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from you. Yours sincerely,
Raj
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Bhaiya,
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  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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