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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and will use up resources.Do you agree or disagree?

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In recent years, most
people
 believe the using aircraft should be restricted because they damage the environment. In my opinion,
although
air
travel
 causes more
pollution
, we can use it for many purposes and should not restrict it at all. Transporting by plane has many advantages
for example
 saving
time
 and transiting a large number of
people
. The most important point about
air
travel
 is causing
pollution
. Among all vehicles, the aeroplane produces the most contamination in the environment, but we can reform it by replacing the old engines with cleaner ones. As well to
air
pollution
, aircraft can cause noise
pollution
.
Although
 we cannot measure the actual impact on all
people
's lives it makes trouble for residents who live near the airport or flight paths.
On the other hand
, there are some advantages to
air
travel
. Nowadays, citizens have many problems with their
time
 and saving
time
 is a very crucial point for them.
Also
, travelling by flight can be a suitable mode of transport for
people
, especially for those who have disabilities or illnesses. So most
people
 prefer to
travel
 by plane for long distances because, in a short
time
, they can do their missions. Meanwhile, aircraft have a large transport capacity. It allows a greater number of passengers to
travel
 by each flight. It seems to be the saving method for fuel. In conclusion,
although
air
travel
 causes serious
pollution
 we should not restrict it at all. We can manage their disadvantages and use them as a comfortable grip for many destinations.
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