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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #time #history
There is a difference of opinion amongst
people
, some consider that
this
 period is the best while others consider olden
time
 was livable. I strongly believe that
life
 became more comfortable as compared to the olden times due to technological advancement.
This
 essay will discuss various aspects of recent times and justify my opinion. Living
life
 irrespective of
time
 depends on personal thinking, older
people
 were happier than now with simple living and high thinking. In the olden
days
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life
 was full of hardships whether it is food, water or shelter. For ,food
people
 were used to
work
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working
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 from early morning till late
night
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at night
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. Most of the
time
people
 were used to walking to move from one place to another
,
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 or used bullock carts, horses and camels
passing
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to pass
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 through roads in mountains, jungles and crossing rivers. In recent
time
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times
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 everything is easily available. The invention of the telephone and
internet
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the internet
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 made
life
 so comfortable. Communication became easier though the distance is in miles. The latest electronic gadgets and utensils eased
life
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the life
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 of women in
a
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the
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 kitchen.
On the other hand
,
people
 used to get all the agricultural and dairy products in pure form, free from pesticides, preservatives and harmful substances. So
people
 were more healthy,
stress
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stressed
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 free and fit comparatively. In
sump
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sum
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 up, there are procs and cons of recent
time
 and pas,
however
, the technological advancement made
life
 easier and
hence
people
 think that
this
 is the best
time
 to live.
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  • unprecedented
  • prosperity
  • technological advancements
  • global connectivity
  • longevity
  • opportunities
  • self-expression
  • renaissance
  • exploration
  • industrial revolution
  • roaring twenties
  • unparalleled
  • groundbreaking
  • transformative
  • revolutionary
  • epoch-making
  • flourished
  • transcended
  • innovations
  • distinguished
  • renaissance artists
  • explorers
  • innovative entrepreneurs
  • exhilarating
  • era
  • unforgettable
  • boom
  • vibrant
  • exuberant
  • transformed
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