Companies should provide sports and social facilities for local communities. To what extent do you agree.

There have been known that the amounts of
companies
which are located in the local area and
people
who live there, should be built sports and social amenities. I strongly believe that that case must support each society ,especially governments. I will explain how to do so in
this
essay.
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agreement
that
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companies
should have space area for communities because they find it easy to spend enjoyable
time
with relatives or friends.
In addition
, these opportunities can be created to
impress
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relationships among
people
. Another benefit is that if factories or
working place
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have a large activities area,
people
will like to enjoy spending moments in these places as
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worker
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.
Furthermore
, governments really appreciate
this
situation
due to
happiness has to affect the population's life positively.
On the other hand
,
parents
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working life will encourage their children
next
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future. ,
Also
job satisfaction can lead to solving some family problems via having flexible
time
in these social areas.
For example
, if one desires to work off a little
time
during working hours and they need some fresh air or sports activities, they can do it in these places at any
time
. After that
companies
really appreciate workers' satisfaction and they believe that they
are
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a vital role in the production of any field.
Therefore
, bosses are more pay attention to workers' requirements regularly.
To conclude
, all over the world
companies
may be interested in community desiring sports and social interaction. As most department workers really want to show and do something about
this
issue by
companies
. Improving facility conditions can
have encouraged
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people
these days.
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