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Some people think it is alright to spend money for their wants, such as a new car or the latest gadget. Others think it is better to save their money and only buy what they really need. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Give specific details and examples in your answer

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There is the biggest problem of managing finances. Some people believe that it is okay to buy what they want
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 as a new car or the latest gadget whilst others think that
one
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 should save
money
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 and
purchase
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 only those
things
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 which he really needs. I personally believe that a person should save
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 and spend on those
things
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 which he really needs.
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 with, nowadays, most people follows trend so they
purchase
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things
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such
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 as cars, clothes or electronic gadgets. They do not care about their future they
purchase
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items
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 for their satisfaction or to show society that they have their own
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. There are consequences in future which are not good
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 as
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 they purchased are inferior quality or if a pandemic occurs how can they survive.
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, during COVID,
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 of my friends lost his job and he already spent on buying a car, a laptop and an expensive mobile phone
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 he faced a lot of obstacles during the pandemic.
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, I believe that
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 should be saved and
one
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 should
purchase
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things
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 when
one
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needs
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. They will
purchase
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 superior quality
items
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 because they know how they save their
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, and how much hard work . They will
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 go for reviews and
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 they
purchase
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.
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, saving
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 will help them in a difficult time. It is
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 said that with
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 a person can
purchase
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 a bed of roses.
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,
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 of my cousins met with an accident and he saved
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 for future use which helps him in his accident. To conclude, in my opinion, save
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 and
purchase
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items
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 when you
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need
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themneed
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. It will help to
purchase
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 superior quality
items
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 and
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money
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 helps in a difficult time.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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