Poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it is difficult to get access to the university education, so some people think universities should make it easier for them to study at. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that
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should do
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rural
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student
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to get
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admission
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higher education. We are going to discuss here
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government intervention
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more important. I will give my opinion in the conclusion, now we are going to discuss and elaborate with a relevant example. On the one hand, Lack of
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issue
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in the rural area as well as connectivity.
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, higher type schooling is not getting in the village
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pupil study.
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, in comparison with
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, they have a good
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technologies
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and
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professional teaching
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. To elaborate, rural students are not aware
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anything which they
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in extra knowledge. Development is very important in the rural area like a city.
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has to be more
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on the villagers.
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people are financially not well to take
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expensive
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learn
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.
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has to take
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for
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student
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.
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, Same
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nationals are
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free education until they are not standing on
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own foot.
Likewise
,
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have
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to give free food in
school
, free hospital for poor people as well as good technology in
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for
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. That will help to learn poor
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with
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to achieve good
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in
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. To conclude, I think I
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with the above sentence but if government take any discission for poverty pupil, it will not require
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university
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to change
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for rural and urban
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