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Museums should display art of their own country, or they should display art from all over the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (May 2021) Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Some
people
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 have a notion that
museums
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 should present the art which is popular across the globe,
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however
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 some
people
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 prefer to think that
museums
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 should carry the heritage of their own
country
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 only. In
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 essay, I will put my thoughts supporting the latter view and the benefit it brings to society. On the one hand, if
museums
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 put art creativity from all over the world in one place, it would become really difficult for a majority of the visitors to remember which art style belongs to which
country
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 as they will try to explore the entire museum in a single visit.
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, these visitors will not acquire an ample amount of knowledge of diverse cultures coming from multiple countries .
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,
Museums
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 displaying the
culture
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 of their own
country
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 have many obvious reasons which I presume overweighs the former part. One of the main reasons to support
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 view is that
people
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 will have to travel to a specific
country
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 in order to visit a museum
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 of which tourists will gain more practical experience as they will get an opportunity to gel up as well as extend their network with
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 from same
culture
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 and
country
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.
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 to
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,
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 change will bolster the tourism industry across the world. In my opinion, Museum is not only efficient but
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 a reliable way to know more about the
culture
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 as well as the history of a particular
country
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.
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, I totally agree that
Museums
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 should portray their own
country
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's
culture
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.
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