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Museums should display art of their own country, or they should display art from all over the world. To what extent do you agree or disagree? (May 2021) Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Some
people
 have a notion that
museums
 should present the art which is popular across the globe,
however
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 some
people
 prefer to think that
museums
 should carry the heritage of their own
country
 only. In
this
 essay, I will put my thoughts supporting the latter view and the benefit it brings to society. On the one hand, if
museums
 put art creativity from all over the world in one place, it would become really difficult for a majority of the visitors to remember which art style belongs to which
country
 as they will try to explore the entire museum in a single visit.
Moreover
, these visitors will not acquire an ample amount of knowledge of diverse cultures coming from multiple countries .
On the other hand
,
Museums
 displaying the
culture
 of their own
country
 have many obvious reasons which I presume overweighs the former part. One of the main reasons to support
this
 view is that
people
 will have to travel to a specific
country
 in order to visit a museum
as a result
 of which tourists will gain more practical experience as they will get an opportunity to gel up as well as extend their network with
people
 from same
culture
 and
country
.
In addition
 to
this
,
this
 change will bolster the tourism industry across the world. In my opinion, Museum is not only efficient but
also
 a reliable way to know more about the
culture
 as well as the history of a particular
country
.
Hence
, I totally agree that
Museums
 should portray their own
country
's
culture
.
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