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People face a lot of difficulty in giving a speech or presentation in public. If the children are being taught in schools, about how to give speech in public, would it be better. How important is it to learn how to speak in public? Do you agree or disagree with the statement? Give relevant examples

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Individuals find great difficulties in public speaking ,
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, if students are being taught it at the
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 will there be an improvement in it .Generally, learning how to speak in public creates career opportunities and it makes
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 easy .
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,
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 writer is in strong agreement with the captioned statement. First and foremost, the skill of speaking to a larger community generates pathways for one's
life
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. Most companies value the capability of their
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 employees to give speeches to the community
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 boosting the
company
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 name, and the person who has
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 ability involuntarily becomes the star of the
company
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 ,even other industrial leaders would try to hire that person for larger wages.
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, OMCO ,one of the leading dental material
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company
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 hired a service manager of a small tech
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 as the Asia Pacific brand ambassador solely
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 his ability in public speaking.
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 , being a better communicator in public is paramount for everybody.
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, proper learning on public communication makes
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 less stressful
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 saving time. In many fields, people have to address larger crowds at least once in a lifetime, and that would make the individual highly stressed
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 some require strenuous preparation for it ,but if we all learned it properly at our
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 it would not be that hard to execute.
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 , in my University most of the lecturers who had taught
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, find it easier to give away lectures than others who require stressful preparation before the lecture.
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 , learning public speaking at the
school
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level
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 produces an easy adult
life
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. In conclusion, the ability of fearless communication in a large gathering boosts one's
life
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 generating more job opportunities and allowing the person to have a better
life
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.
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 writer has in strong notion that teaching public speaking at the
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 is very important.

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structure
Ensure your essay has a clear structure, with distinct introductory, body, and concluding paragraphs. Your essay does this well, helping the reader to follow your argument.
focus
Keep your main points clear and directly related to the question throughout. Your essay demonstrates this effectively by staying focused on the importance of public speaking skills.
examples
Use specific examples to support your points. Your examples from OMCO and your university experience effectively illustrate your arguments. More variety in examples could further strengthen your essay.
transitions
Transition smoothly between ideas and paragraphs to maintain a natural flow. Your use of linking words and phrases effectively connects your ideas, but consider varying your transitions for a more sophisticated style.
use of examples
Effective use of a real-world example (OMCO) to support your argument, demonstrating a good grasp of how to use evidence in persuasive writing.
introduction and conclusion
Clear and comprehensive introduction and conclusion, anchoring your essay solidly and summarizing your arguments effectively.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication skills
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • academic performance
  • critical thinking
  • organization
  • competitive edge
  • glossophobia
  • leadership qualities
  • coherent
  • empowers
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