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Causes of land degradation and it affects which countries?

The pie chart provides information about the main reasons for the decrease in
land
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 productivity on earth while the table
graph
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 points out how three continents were affected by factors during the 1990s. As can be seen from the pie
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, over-grazing has the highest proportion of global
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 deterioration. The information provided from the table
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 reveals
Europe
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 has the highest percentage of total
land
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 degraded. In the pie chart, three main factors can lead to the aggravation of worldwide
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. The
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 and most fatal reason was over-grazing with 35% meanwhile the
second
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 cause was deforestation which presented 30% compared to the less damaged factor (over-cultivation ) with 28%. In the table
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, there are three regions: North
America
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,
Europe
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, and
Oceania
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.
Europe
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 had the highest proportion of deforestation, which was up to 9.8% while
Oceania
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 presented 1.7%, compared to 0.2% in North
America
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. The percentage of over-cultivation in
Oceania
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 was lower than in
Europe
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, at 0% and 7.7%, respectively. Over-grazing in
Oceania
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 was higher than in
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 by 5.8%,
Oceania
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 was almost triple higher than in North
America
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. Total
land
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 degraded in
Europe
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 is higher than in
Oceania
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 and North
America
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 ( 23% compared to 13% and 5%).

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