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In many places, new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe that it is more important to protect the countryside and not build new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

#places #homes #space #countryside #people
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Few
people
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 believe that urbanisation should be limited to
cities
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 and
countryside
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 places should be left open so that they will not disturb nature. It is strongly believed that if start doing more construction in the
countryside
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 it will lead to serious global warming effects.
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 essay discusses both points. Nowadays we can see
cities
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 turning into concrete jungles and the kids of
this
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 generation hardly see Moon. Many new buildings were constructed to accommodate more
people
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.Many realtors are turning lakes into commercial spaces.
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 of
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, there is no empty space left in
cities
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.
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 , in the olden ,days we used to have large playgrounds at school and kids used to play all the outdoor games and they keep their bodies healthy and fit. But now dues to the lack of open space kids hardly play outdoor games and they are not really doing any physical work.
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, we can see a rise in the migration of
people
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 from rural areas to
cities
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 and towns .
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 is mainly because they don't have adequate work to do in the
countryside
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 and they can earn more in
cities
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 as they can expect more work here. As the population in
cities
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 is increasing , many
people
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 are occupying the nearby
countryside
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 places to build new homes and commercial places. I strongly believe that we should no touch the open lands in the
countryside
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 as they are our only way of protecting nature and it
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 helps to decrease the global warming effects.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Ecological benefits
  • Biodiversity conservation
  • Carbon sequestration
  • Sustainable development
  • Eco-friendly building materials
  • Green architecture
  • Government policies
  • Urban sprawl
  • Infrastructure
  • Smart planning
  • Agricultural lands
  • Rural areas
  • Population growth
  • Environmental sensitivity
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