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The percentage of overweight children in western countries has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

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In the
last
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 ten years, the number of
children
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 suffering from
obesity
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 in western countries has risen by almost 20%. Doing less exercise and eating much junk food are the main reasons for that.
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,
children
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’s
health
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 deteriorated, causing many
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 issues, and overweight
children
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 might lose confidence as well. One of the
first
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 reasons the number of
obesity
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 increased so quickly is that
children
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 always sitting and lack exercise.
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, as technology developed,
children
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 are more willing to spend more time sitting before the computer and playing computer games rather than going outside to have a walk. Another reason that needs to be considered is
children
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 are the main group of people who consume fatty food.
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 as chips and pizza which are full of oil.
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, those unhealthy diets would cause weight growth rapidly.
Obesity
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 would cause many
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 issues for
children
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.
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, they might have a high blood level or diabetes at a very young age, so they need to pay more attention to their playing and Eating Behavior. They cannot play with everything as well as eat everything,
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 might cause some psychological problems.
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, some overweight
children
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 might lose confidence in themselves. Because of
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,
children
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 might not like to express themselves freely since they are afraid of judgement coming from other people,
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 as giving a performance before their peers.
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,
obesity
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 might cause ill-effect both on their body and their maid. In conclusion, lack of exercise and eating much junk food would lead to a bad effect on
children
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’s bodies and minds. Teachers in the school should always give some
health
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 education classes and parents should give their
children
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 a good example at home.

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