The major cities in around the world continue growth, the more problems they many have. What the problems young people are caused by develop ? What can be done to solve this.

Nowadays, the major
cities
around the world continue growing and,
as a result
, more
problem
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problems
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also
occurred due to
this
development
in the world. Young
people
are facing difficulties due
this
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growth. In
this
essay, I will explain why the case is so and give some possible
solution
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solutions
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to eliminate
this
problem in the upcoming paragraphs. There are many problems
which
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that
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young individuals are facing due to
development
in metropolitan
cities
around the globe.
First
and foremost, housing problems, majorly in city areas
youngster
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youngsters
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are facing difficulties
to find
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finding
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renting houses due to
dense
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the dense
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population in
cities
.
Secondly
, due to
development
in industries and
increasing
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increase
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in employment more and more
people
migrating from regional towns to
cities
for employment,
as a result
,
cities
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cities'
city's
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population increases day per day and less scope vacant for young
people
.
Furthermore
, traffic congestion is the most noticeable problem among them.
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are facing difficulties
to reach at
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reaching
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their office on time due to long
jam
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jams
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.
Moreover
, due to industries and other sectors majority of
people
uses
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their private vehicles and for that reason,
air
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the air
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pollution rate increases very rapidly.
For example
,
in
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Delhi
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,Delhi
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one of the
cities
in India
have
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high
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a high
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pollution rate compared to other
cities
.
On the other hand
, there are some solutions to eliminate these problems.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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should encourage
people
to use more public vehicles
instead
of private cars for their office and other work purposes, which helps
people
to live in
fresh
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a fresh
the fresh
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air environment.
Secondly
,
also
government should deploy more flyovers and construct good roadways ,
which
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helps
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help
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individuals to reach
at
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their destination on time.
Also
,
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the authority
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authority
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authorities
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should give work to the young
people
who are still
unemployedto
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unemployed
unemployed to
living
cities
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in cities
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. In conclusion,
development
in
cities
around the world
have
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some drawbacks which
affects
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negatively on young
people
. In my opinion,
by
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giving them work in other sectors and developed
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flyovers
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along with roadways helps
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a youngster
the youngster
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to reach
at
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apply
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their destination on time.
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