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The qualities a person needs to become truly successful cannot be learned at a university or similar academic instituition.To what extent do ou agree or disagree?

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Many
people
 focus their lives to be successful, some think that going to a good university is a life target for them, but somebody thinks that being a quality
person
 doesn’t depend on an academic diploma.From
this
 point of my view, I believe that having a great academic level is the basement to be a good
person
.
First
, if you can graduate from a good university, congratulations to you that you experience happiness and sadness, the strength of effort and go through social with peers and teachers.That all make you grow up and experience you be a better
person
, having more strength to face difficulties and gives you more experiences to face life smilingly.When you at 16 years old, when you found out that your friends discuss you badly, you may have a direct conflict with your friends and cause a bad
effect
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 on each other, but when you get older, the event happens again, and you may leave away with a smile and decide in your heart”found a wrong friend”.School let us intercommunicate with
people
 that make us stronger, that make better us happen.
However
, the environmental impact
also
 influences
people
 to be a type of
person
.Family,
in particular
, basically has a whole vibe for children during they growing up.
For instance
, a family whose parents are both teachers will impart to students lots of different skills by their friends who may
also
 be teachers ,
also
 they will organize their children differently structured courses in favour of their studies and make success in their class.That definitely will give them confidence and
then
 they will know the flavour of success and will study harder.
By contrast
, those who don’t know how to study or don’t have the condition are in lack them. So to
think
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 be a truly successful
person
 should have well-educated
first
 so that they can know what type of
person
 they should be.What’s more, they already experienced a lot so that they can’t be beaten easily and know how to work harder and
also
 be kind to
people
.
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