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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause social problems ,as well as practical problems.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#country #language
Nowadays, most
people
 leave to another
country
 for many purposes.
Although
 it is hard to survive in a
country
 with multinational languages. Because
this
 can be
a
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 impact on one’s social and personal life. I would argue that I completely agree and it would be hard to live in
foreign
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a foreign
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country
 due to language barriers and cultural variability. On one hand, there are multinational
people
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who live
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live
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 in foreign countries
which
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 would hold responsible for many languages within one society. In
this
case
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 when we need help from any person we can’t explain it to them. even buying something from markets
that
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is where you mostly lacked behind. So
this
 would impact in making you highly stressed over the life.
Moreover
, Fock of cultures are included and the
people
 should know how to adapt to any culture in case if you want to achieve life goals, from my experience my cousin moved to India for studies. There
were
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 no one to be his friend he
shattered
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 due to
lack
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a lack
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 of support.  
On the other hand
, In developed countries wages are mostly six figures.
This
 is the main reason
people
 tend to choose abroad over
mother
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their mother
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country
. Because it surely
be
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a
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hope for the future and
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a path
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for
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to
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 a luxury lifestyle.
Furthermore
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 there are many jobs available in
foreign
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the foreign
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 job market,
that
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which
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 could be a great merit for
the
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teenagers to look for
the
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opportunities. You can
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be enrolled
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enrolled
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enrol
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with
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 a job according to your expectations which make you happy.
For example
, more than 50% of
people
 now migrate for jobs due to
lack
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a lack
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 of job opportunities in their own
country
.  To conclude, I would like to affirm my position that it can affect
in
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you in
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 many ways while you live in another
country
 because cultural differences and language barriers are at
the
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their
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 peak in those countries.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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