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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on young children. Do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, the global era makes us
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 more technology
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 as computers than past few times. In fact, some
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 believe that
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 who use a
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 frequently have more disadvantages than disadvantages. In my opinion, I disagree with
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 statement because there are two main positive impacts that teenagers could get and those are getting more knowledge effectively and could adapt
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 any changes. In any detail, taking more knowledge effectively means
children
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 could know about anything they want by surfing the
information
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 on the
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. As we know that now
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 connected to the internet gives us an easier way to look for
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,
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 students will have opportunities to learn more mattery. To extend, research results from Diponegoro University said that young
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 access more
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 than old
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 because of the difference in time that they use in front of a
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. Another good effect of
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 using a
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 is they could adapt more easily than
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 who do not use it.
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 impact happened because when playing they face some difficulties
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 in advanced sections
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 as coding, too much
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, and some errors.
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 of something that they do not want to happen, they have to adapt and look for another way for getting
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, and it likely will be an experience for
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 to face trouble in real life. In conclusion, I believe that sitting in front of a
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, especially for teenagers has two positive impacts because they could get
information
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 and could adapt to any conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Screen time
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Physical inactivity
  • Cognitive development
  • Internet addiction
  • Cyberbullying
  • Inappropriate content
  • Digital literacy
  • Virtual learning environments
  • Parental controls
  • Moderation
  • Online safety
  • Tech-savvy
  • E-learning
  • Information technology
  • Eye strain
  • Social skills
  • Multitasking
  • Interactive education
  • Health repercussions
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