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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade*-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries.
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The tables below
reveals
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 how
differed
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 about
sales
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 of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
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 and
bananas
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 in 1999 and 2004. At first sight, it can be clearly seen that Switzerland was placed on the highest
about
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the
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sales
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 of
coffee
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 and the
UK
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also
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 had the largest
sales
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 of
bananas
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 in 1999. The notice features are, by the time of 2004, the
UK
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 business rocketed at both
coffee
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 and
bananas
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;
made
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UK
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the UK
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 the biggest business in
coffee
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 and
bananas
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, compared to Switzerland, the revenue of
coffee
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 went two times and five times for
bananas
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.
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, the three other
nations
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sales
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 were significantly fewer in a comparison with
UK
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 and Switzerland in 2004. All of them had a
slightly
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 growth in
coffee
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 and except Denmark, the others two fell
gentlely
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gently
 in
bananas
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fairtrade sales
  • significant growth
  • trends and patterns
  • market expansion
  • sustainable consumption
  • ethical products
  • consumer awareness
  • economic impact
  • percentage increase
  • market share
  • profit margins
  • trade initiatives
  • consumer behavior
  • retail figures
  • economic indicators
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