Some people think that government is responsible for the rise in obesity in children. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

It is widely believed that

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governments

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governments

are to blame for the rising

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of obese children in society today. I strongly agree with

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point of view for a

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of reasons. Most governments fail to regulate

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various nutrition-poor foods that target the youth. As well as

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, little has been done to provide healthier and cheaper

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alternatives .

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expand on these points and their effects.

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of all, I will discuss the failure of the governing bodies to regulate the advertising campaigns of many global junk

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corporations that target adolescents. Health and

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ministries often do not monitor the content of advertisements giving complete freedom to marketing companies, with few boundaries and instructions as to how they should be done.

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has resulted in companies

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as Cadburys and

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often promoting various foodstuffs that are detrimental to our well-being, to our most vulnerable and easily gullible members of society.

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usually leads to children often pressuring their parents into

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these snacks or meals ,often succeeding without knowing the full implications of these products on their health.

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, little has been done to introduce healthier

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choices in many grocery stores. Struggling parents are often forced to buy cheaper less

nutritionous

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nutritious

nutritional

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as nutritious beneficial choices are often unavailable or pricier.

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can be seen in

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deserts in certain regions of the USA whereby black and

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communities have

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a rising

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number

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of obese children due to limited healthier

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products. In

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instance

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the government should intervene and provide better

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in these areas, as their inability to do so has led to

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the increasing

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of youth obesity as well as the

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corresponding

health effects. To conclude, childhood obesity is a matter of growing concern. The government are mostly to blame as they have failed to prevent certain adverts from airing as well as provide beneficial

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nutrient rich

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foods to certain isolated communities.

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more should be done to tackle

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epidemic.