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Many people believe that advertising can have negative effects on customers. To what extent do you agree?

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Advertising
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 had an impactful effect on customers.
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, there are
people
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 who believe it has a negative outcome. While
people
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 think it is positive to have a way of introducing a variety of products others disagree.
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 essay will show how negative effects on consumers aren't effective. There are,
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, advertising is beneficial for our society to see new products.
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 is simply because, without having a way to reach the
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,
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 they won't be able to purchase them.
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, if a new phone device is announced, It will have advantages that will improve communication,
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people
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 will purchase it. Marketing makes it easier for
people
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 to discover new stuff. Ultimately, commercials are helpful for the community. There are those who believe spreading awareness about their stuff is boring.
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 it is because some ads were repetitive on social media platforms,
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 it will certainly make
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 unhappy.
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, If a new laptop got announced more than 3 times in the same month,
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people
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 will lose interest in the laptop.
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 is a negative outcome, but
people
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 will still come back to have another look later on.
People
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 can be bored and will still possibly buy it.
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 means, that campaigns sometimes could be boring.
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, it doesn't deny the possibility of purchasing. In conclusion, I believe commercials are helpful for the community to purchase a variety of beneficial
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. Communicating the
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 through marketing will improve the chance of discovery. Ads will continue to have positive outcomes for sharing stuff through social.
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