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There have been vast advances in most aspects of people's lives especially in the education field. Some

university

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students

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believe that learning a different subject

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their main

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major is essential.

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, there are another group who claim that the main aim of going to

university

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is studying for related

qualification

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. I strongly support the view of the first group. I would like to start off my discussion

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writing about the benefits of learning

dinnerent

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different

subjects simultaneously with the main

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course. Nowadays,

due to

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the improvements in science and technology, people encounter more issues in their

everydays

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everyday

lives which force them to learn

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variety of skills to be able to tackle those immense problems.

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students

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spend almost four of their best years at universities

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give

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them lots of time and

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to increase their knowledge in different fields

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those regarding the application of modern technology to utilize that

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their lives.

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, another point of view argues that the main purpose of going to

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is to

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achieve

qualification

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qualifications

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and

skill

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skills

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in one single major to become

master

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a master

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and professional in one field. We can not deny the specific aim of studying for higher degrees. Meanwhile, it should

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in mind that people have different intellectual capacities,

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, expecting all the

students

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to follow different subjects

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their main

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course is not realistic and each individual student is responsible for their decisions and the path they choose during their studies. To summarize, based on what is discussed above,

students

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with different

skillsets

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skill sets

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and capacities have different

opinion

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opinions

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about either

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new

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subject

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their

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or merely

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on their main course and

master on

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that. As it is mentioned I agree with the former.

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

301 words

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