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Most people say that in order for one to be fluent in a language, they must live and work for sometime in that Country. Do you agree/disagree?

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Being able to communicate with
one
 another distinguishes us from the rest of the mammals living on the planet earth. While some people believe that
one
 can speak fluently a new
language
 unless
one
 works and lives in a country where it is being spoken, others argue that
one
 can learn a new
language
 online easily. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides of the argument while I support the latter opinion. On the
one
 hand, many people believe that learning a new
dialect
 in a nation where the majority of people speak it can turn anyone into a fluent speaker.
This
 is because of the fact that by doing
this
one
 can develop to sound and speak like a native speaker.
For instance
, an individual, who was born and bred in India, working abroad, let us say The UK, will sound more like an English speaker because of the exposure to conversing with native English speakers regularly, improving their pronunciation and vocabulary on a daily basis.
On the other hand
, I would argue that
one
 can learn any
dialect
 locally provided that
one
 has access to the internet. The reason for
this
 is that an individual can learn any
dialect
 online by signing up for lessons conducted by the native speakers themselves. To illustrate
this
 point, there are numerous mobile applications which can allow an individual with internet facilities to learn a
language
 of his choice with a click of a button. The flipside of
this
, if
one
 can only learn a new
language
 by working abroad, many would hesitate to learn a new
language
 because of unwillingness to reallocate. Having looked at both sides,
although
 learning a new
dialect
 in a country where it is being spoken can certainly turn a person into fluent in speaking, the same experience can be replicated in online sessions conducted by the faculties who are native speakers themselves.
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