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Do you agree or disagree about marrying before the age of 30

Most people agree that relationships over the
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 of 30 tend to be long-lasting than
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 who get married earlier. I completely disagree with
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 idea because from my perspective,
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 experience a better relationship when marrying before the
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 of 30. The main reason for
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 argument is that
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 who choose to get married earlier will indefinitely form a stronger, tighter bond with their intimate partner.
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 will in turn affect the mental health
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 both individuals positively
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 because whenever there are times in which the other person is coping with stress or experiencing hardships in their lives, they will have a shoulder to lie on, someone that they are able to share their true feelings with. Studies have shown that
couples
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 who have been through an early relationship realize that the more obstacles they face together, the more they will grow together and understand one another.
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 other hand, individuals who married exceeding the
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 of 30 had an increased chance of having fertility issues and inheriting diseases
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 their newborns.
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 has been proved to be accurate, as data suggests that the population of women in pregnancy past the
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 of 30 showed an increased rate of inheriting certain diseases to their
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. Particularly, it is better for
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 to be in an earlier marital status as it can help them deal with any existing problems and familiarize themselves with their responsibilities and roles in the family, which inevitably leads to a positive impact on their relationship in the future. In conclusion, the appropriate
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 for marriage is somewhere between 25
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under 30, whilst
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 who marry over the
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 of 30 will be likely to fall apart easily.

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