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Some people believe that the media, such as the press, TV and Internet should be more strictly controlled. Others feel that controls should be loosened to give people freer access to information. Discuss both views.

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It is true that knowledge is power and various medium of disseminating
information
 have erupted to include the Internet, press and TV. While some people argued that
media
 should be strictly limited, others believed it shouldn’t so as to allow its recipient access to
information
.
This
 essay would discuss these two points of view. On the one hand, it is true that access to unlimited
information
 allows a broader view and knowledge about tropical issues.
This
 would allow recipients to make a well-informed stance and opinion on
such
 issues.
For instance
, the initial
media
 report of the case of domestic violence against Johnny deep kept him in the bad lime till he was granted an interview to state his own claims.
This
 singular act would have ended his career if
information
 from both parties weren't aired.
On the other hand
, strict regulations on
media
 are needed to curb social vices and early exposure to underage. Various pop-up adverts on porn sites could lead to early exposure to sexual activity among underage who use the
media
.
Furthermore
, restricted access to
media
 can help reduce the incidence of addiction and inculcate morals in developing minds. The amount of time used on the Internet could be put to good use by teaching people to volunteer in community services or developing life skills.
For example
, research has shown that the longer the screen time among underage, the more difficult it is for them to communicate effectively. In summary, while it is true that regulations of the
media
 should be encouraged, it is
also
 beneficial in some aspects to make a well-formed opinion on issues.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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