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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the internet rather than teachers in classrooms. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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The internet
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 development makes it possible that students can take online courses, particularly after the outbreak of Covid-19. A large number of mentees and mentors are attracted by the merits of
this
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 there are some demerits. There are several advantages of
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. It can save lots of time and money. Anywhere available
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 the Internet, educators can give lectures to their pupils
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 their cellphones, laptop or pad. There is no doubt that
this
 will reduce commuting time to
classroom
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 and even expenditure on accommodation fees.
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,
online
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an online
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class
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classes
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 can promote equality of
education
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resource
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. Due to the excellent physical and spiritual environment, large cities attract
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increasingly
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 number of mentors from distinguished universities and the education gap
of
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the
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poor and rich areas has been extended day by day. E-lectures enables students from rural areas to gain
same
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 teaching resource.
On the other hand
, compared to traditional
face to face
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 classes, those who take online classes are easier to be distracted as there is no
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 from teachers and peers and they may open other social media,
such
 as
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TikTok
, youtube or
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.
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, it is difficult for them to carry out team projects or converse with their classmates and they just take classes and complete homework entirely alone.
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 to the cons of online education, drawbacks pale
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insignificance as long as pupils can be motivated or focused and build
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a friendship
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friendship
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 after class.
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