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You were hurt in a minor accident inside a supermarket, and you wish to complain to the supermarket.

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Introduction
Dear Supermarket Manager,
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My name is Rose Tam, and I had an accident inside your supermarket. More information is provided below.
Body paragraph 2
By accident, I entered your supermarket
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 Saturday (17-08-2021) time is 8:30pm , and wanted to make a purchase. The price of the oat milk appeared to be $8 pounds, but the price card was different, so I wasn'
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 sure what that meant. I want to ask your customer support about that. That young girl's name, which was written on her clothing, is Jennie, as far as I can recall.
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 I attempted to discuss the entire price with her, but she not only yelled back at me impatiently rather than paying any attention to what I had to say as a whole. “Please don'
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 waste my time!” and throw the oat milk down. That was extremely nasty of her to me, I was completely shocked.
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 I didn'
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 rebate with her, I figured that if I didn'
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 discuss
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 incident with you, she might be impolite to other customers.
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 to expressing my displeasure in writing to you, I sincerely hope you will address the situation and provide me with an explanation of why there was a problem with your staff.
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I appreciate your assistance.
Conclusion
Rose Tam

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