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Life was better when technology was simpler. To what extent agree or disagree?

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Our lives used to be more fulfilling when
technology
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 was less advanced. I take the view that the benefits of modern
technology
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 prevail over its disadvantages. The
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 argument in favour of cutting-edge
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 is that it has made our lives much less laborious. Many tasks which require a noticeable amount of energy and time can be done much more
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. As a clear example, once had to people communicate with one another by writing letters
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 they had to take it to post office and
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 wait for it to be delivered while these days everyone can simply get in touch with whomever they desire in
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 through modern messaging applications
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 as WhatsApp or Telegram. From an educational standpoint, the internet has enriched people’s knowledge by providing them with a large amount of information, which can make everyone well informed on various subjects. From a student’s angle, in the ,past they had to mainly the over-reliance of many on teachers or physical references for their research and projects, and these were in many cases inaccessible. Learners at present time,
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, can find almost everything in the vast world of the internet with a few clicks. On the negative side, it has been claimed that state-of-the-art
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 can inhibit individuals from communicating with each other on a deeper level. It might be true, but if people are taught how not to let electronic devices invade their personal relationships,
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 problem can be prevented to a large extent.
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, media can be a proper platform to raise people’s awareness regarding and stops a number of individuals from considering technological advances a negative development. In conclusion, life has been improved by technological breakthroughs, particularly by labour-saving devices and learning opportunities provided by the internet.
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