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Some people choose private health care centers rather than public service centers what is your opinion?

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In today's, world public is spending more money on private health care centres than public centres because the infrastructure and the services provided by them are faster compared to public health care
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 patients in government hospitals are huge in number so it's
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 time-consuming. In the
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 paragraph, I'll be discussing which service is best and the reasons for it. To start in the private sector the doctors who treat the patients are well experienced and
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 treatment is done via appointments so there will be less number of patients
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 the doctor will spend some time to get know our problems in-depth
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 if we go into a government hospital for a check-up
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 we need to wait for hours in order to meet the physician but
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, if we need to meet a private physician we have to book for the appointment before and go at the time allotted to us in
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 process we won't waste time.
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, private organisations charge more fees in order to meet the physician
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 the doctors there tell us to get diagnosed with certain check-up which is unwanted
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 to make a surgery or even operation the bills reaches skys the service charges of
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 industry is very high while compared to any other industry today. To conclude in my point of view for a general health problem like cold and cough or fever
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 it's better to visit a normal specialist but if the issue is serious
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 it's better to visit a private hospital because they don't take days to diagnose.
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