Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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highly controversial
of
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whether
people
should face
with
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an unpleasant reality,
such
as a bad occupation and lack of money or manage to improve it. I will examine both
point
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of
views
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and
then
give my own opinion.
People
argued that it is best to accept bad things.
This
is because they believe that if they try to do nothing but face with
hurtful
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the hurtful
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situation, they will pass it and continue existing. As a matter of fact, when someone meets bad situations, they rarely deal with it but hide from it in order to not to have any other
problems
and maybe to live
peacefuly
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peacefully
.
For instance
, many
people
find that it
better
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to live
although
having no job or lack
of
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assets.
On the other hand
, it is believed that we should try and deal with
such
problems
. There is a reason why
people
believe
this
when the
problems
solved
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, everyone can spend
their
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quality
of
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lifetime
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. They witness situations
everyday
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. But when they try to improve them, they are not only stronger
at
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both physical health and mental health but
also
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acquire
accquire
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acquire
proper experiences and skills.
Nevertheless
, after they tackle all of the
problems
, they will live in peace and
happy
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. A good illustration of
this
is
people
who try to rise up are usually happier than those who want to hide from them.
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summarize
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,
i
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believe both of the statements have merits. On balance,
i
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believe that
people
should try to make their life
worth-living
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worth living
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by meeting obstacles and
get
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through them. What is life without challenges?
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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