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It is believed that schools should focus more on practical skills than theory. How far do you agree? Why?

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In today's modern world that mostly the informatics revolution shaped, we need skilled and experienced workers more than ever.
Schools
 are the places where
children
 are being trained both theoretically and practically. According to a view,
children
's
education
 in
schools
 should focus more on practical
skills
 than
theory
. From my previous experiences and knowledge, I am so close to
this
 idea. After establishing mandatory
education
 in our daily life,
children
 started to spend most of their time in
schools
. They improved their literacy, arithmetics, science and kind of art
skills
 via lots of teachers.
In addition
, they became an ideal citizen of industrialized societies thanks to
schools
. A significant part of the
education
 process was based on
theory
 in the nineteenth and twentieth centuries.
However
, the way of living human life and the
skills
 that an average person must hold changed dramatically. In our recent history, there were technological advances in the whole world that shaped our lives, changed some of the professions' definitions and removed the jobs that people have been fulfilling for centuries.
Moreover
, we realised that
theory
 is always changing and do not need to exhaust
children
 with a chunk of theoretical knowledge. We became more pragmatic since reaching resources which teach
theory
 is so easy more than ever but acquiring basic
skills
 still is required to be practised. To sum up, expectations from
schools
 changed from term to term. It's true that
children
 living in the nineteenth century must be learned some basic theories and obtained citizenship
skills
instead
 of spending lots of time with practice. But in today's pragmatic world where theoretical knowledge can be learned at any time, humanity needs more practically skilled workers.
Last
 but not least,
education
 in
schools
 should be based on more pratic.
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