Young people committing crimes should be treated the same as adults by the authorities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Crime
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is increasing every day in society. Many nations believe,
jail
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that jail
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is the solution to
crime
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.
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, there are numerous better solutions available by educating people, which give an insight
of
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into
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the law,
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and career
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development, and improve
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responsiveness
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. Education provides
a
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major importance of the law for people. Individual commit crimes without
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knowing
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the effect of it, so the education process
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rigid actions on
crime
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.
This
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stops people from committing crimes in communities.
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, education on the law made me know all the criminal laws and stops my action in the circumstances of
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crime
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the crime
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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