It is important for people to take risks, in both their professional lives and personal lives. Do the advantages of taking these risks outweigh the disadvantages?

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some
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risky experience determines a bad influence on
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, there are others who consider to taking risks brings a benefit change, both in a professional career as well as private
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. I concur
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advantages outweigh any disadvantages. On the one hand, it can be thought
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people
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a risky move create an insecure person as a consequence of failure in
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new experience. Indeed, a problem when a person
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a
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is make
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a mistake that could influence
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his psyche, follows
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personal problems.
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, in many companies, when employees try to overcome themselves to get a new position without good results,
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affects
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their
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good results and
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not
taking
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a risk
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risk
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risks
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in their private
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being a monotonous routine.
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, a big
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of taking risks is a
life
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change if the result of
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is good.
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, when
people
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have a positive change, directly affects
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their career and
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personal lives.
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, the
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of
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Mark
Zuckerberg is knowledge because he was studying to be a good professional
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Harvard when he take the decision to create Facebook, as a consequence of
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risk
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, he created a big fortune, he began to earn a big amount of money being a multimillionaire.
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, It can be seen the balance of his decision of private and professional move, result in a successful person. In conclusion, I believe
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a risky move is
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benefit
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to
people
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in many ways despite some
people
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thing the contrary.
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, there are many
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of
successful
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a successful
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businessman
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businessmen
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who did not have fear of
take
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taking
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risk
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risks
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Opportunities
  • Growth
  • Innovation
  • Challenges
  • Self-discovery
  • Resilience
  • Uncertainty
  • Consequences
  • Calculated risks
  • Stagnation
  • Regret
  • Comfort zone
  • Entrepreneurship
  • Adventurous spirit
  • Thriving
  • Failure
  • Mitigate
  • Reap the rewards
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