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Some people believe that women should be able to join their country’s army and police forces. Others think that only men should be allowed to work in these areas. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It has long been a subject of discussion whether few people believe that women should be able to join their country's army and police forces. In my opinion, the former notion has several elements that deserve attention and I will explain why by using pertinent arguments. There are myriad arguments in favour of my context, and the most conspicuous one lies in the fact that the masses should be extra careful with their decisions.
For example
, according to a recent survey done by Stanford University, 45 per cent of individuals take benefit from the above-mentioned notion, whereas 30 per cent of people face disadvantages due to it.
Hence
, it is apparent why many citizens are in favour of the above stance. Another argument in support of my view is that governments worldwide have become more active in dealing with
this
 situation. To illustrate, as per academic research carried out by the Australian government, 60 per cent of forces gained immensely from the proposed government reforms. They improved their existing scenario tremendously and that paved the way for a better economic future.
Therefore
, not only will
this
 make societies more careful and pragmatic in their approach, but
also
 it will lead to a better living standard. From what has been discussed above, one can conclude that the potential benefits of armies are far more than the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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