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Many wild birds and animals live in towns and cities. Some people think that the wildlife should be protected. Some think that they should be removed. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#birds #animals #towns #cities #people #wildlife #think
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are
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developed and
population
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the population
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 is increasing, they
cutdown
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 the trees and woods for more land to live, due to
this
 many wild animals are losing their
home
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homes
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 and go into deep woods but some animals did not move and they try to live
or
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 some time visit in
towns
 and
cities
. Many
people
 debut that
this
 wildlife should be protected and
other
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others
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 forcing that they should not allow in
cities
 and should be removed. On the one hand, there are some peoples, who want to protect wildlife and argue that human has
stills
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 the land and treat
as
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it as
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it
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if it
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 is
there
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their
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 own
,
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 when it is part of mother earth and we should share the land.
Furthermore
,
people
 are destroying their
home
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homes
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 and as
a
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 effect, many animal species losing their population and
about
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 to extinct. For
an
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instant, many small
town
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towns
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 are created near
Sasan
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the Sasan
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 Gir jungle
it
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 effect
on
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loins, many
time
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times
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the
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they
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 visit the nearby
towns
for
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to
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hunt
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a hunt
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.
On the other hand
, many
people
 want to remove wild animals from
towns
 and
cities
 because there are many incidents
happen
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that happen
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 when wild
animal
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animals
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 kill
the
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people
 and take
the
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small children.
In addition
, they kill cattle
also
 and many
time
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 they get to much wild and distorted the properties.
For example
, there
are
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town
 where leopard kills the child and sometimes wild elephant enter
into
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town
 and destroy
the
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house and public property. In my opinion, we should
the
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protect the wild lives because they are part of
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our
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out
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our
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 home planet and
it
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they
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 are essential in
food
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the food
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 chain.
However
, I
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that, if do not
distory
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destroy
distort
 their homes and we build
town
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towns
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 and
cities
 where they are not living. so they will never come to
towns
. To conclude, some
people
 want to protect
then
 wildlife because
,
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they are part of nature and they are necessary for
balance
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the balance
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 of nature. While
,
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 other
people
 are
concern
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concerned
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 about
safety
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the safety
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 of
people
 and cattle and they want to remove
from
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them from
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towns
 and
cities
.
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