Increasing the price is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
The importance of a
price
rise in transportation fees which was always debatable has now become more controversial with many people claiming that it is beneficial Use synonyms
while
others reject Linking Words
this
notion. From my point of view, it is essential to raise the costs of using Linking Words
vehicles
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due to
the reduction of air pollution and encouragement of using other ways of transport.
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with, if the costs of private Linking Words
cars
grow, people will be less likely to Use synonyms
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cars
as normal traffic tools. Use synonyms
Thus
, the carbon emission from the multitude of Linking Words
cars
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then
decrease. Research shows that transportation is the fourth most polluting industry in the world. It accounts for around 5% of the global carbon dioxide emission. Linking Words
Although
the carbon emission issue includes a lot of different aspects, the environment will improve if we start to drive less.
Apart from reducing pollution, higher prices in the usage of Linking Words
vehicles
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use
more public transportation. In Use synonyms
this
day and age, the cost of public transport is quite low. Linking Words
For instance
, if we travel by MTR in Hong Kong, the ticket fee is usually below $20 which is a one-time fee. Linking Words
However
, driving Linking Words
cars
is more expensive nowadays. If the government increases the Use synonyms
price
of using private Use synonyms
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, many citizens may not be able to afford the high Use synonyms
price
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As a result
, they will Linking Words
use
other transports. Use synonyms
In addition
, they will even try to choose walking Linking Words
instead
of using the bus or MTR.
In conclusion, I firmly think that we should increase the Linking Words
price
of using private Use synonyms
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because it can diminish the negative impact on the environment and change the mindset of the public that we have to Use synonyms
use
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. As long as we do that, our Earth will become more sustainable.Use synonyms
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