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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choice To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choice
In our generation, groups of people think that we have too many
choices
 in nowadays society.
However
, in my opinion, I do not agree
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this
 view.Because the situations and
factors
 we face will limit the number of
choices
 which we can decide. On the one hand, it is true that we have numerous
kinds
 of
choices
 in our daily life.
For example
, when we go to the night market we can select what
kinds
 of food we want to eat and 
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 the flour of the cuisine.
However
, most
kinds
 of problems
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 we have lots of
decisions
 do not play an important role in our daily life and we only have
seldom
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decisions
 about the important issue.
On the other hand
, we only have several
choices
 when we have to consider different abundant
factors
.Taking job finding for
instant
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,
first
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 we need to think about what
kinds
 of
job
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 we can do and
also
 the major what I study in the university, even the salary is an essential factor we need to think over.
Hence
, we only have
few
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decisions
 after lots of consideration.So we do not have enough
choices
 because we need to premeditate different types of situations and
factors
 on the significant problems. To summarize, I agree we have lots of different
kinds
 of
decisions
 in daily life
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 the food or some not essential things.
However
, we only have rare
choices
 when we face
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significant
choices
 which have excessive
factors
 that need to consider.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • decision fatigue
  • myriad
  • dissatisfaction
  • regret
  • paralysis of action
  • empowers
  • preferences
  • innovation
  • competitiveness
  • fosters
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