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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choice To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In our generation, groups of people think that we have too many
choices
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 in nowadays society.
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, in my opinion, I do not agree
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this
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 view.Because the situations and
factors
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 we face will limit the number of
choices
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 which we can decide. On the one hand, it is true that we have numerous
kinds
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 of
choices
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 in our daily life.
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, when we go to the night market we can select what
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 of food we want to eat and 
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 the flour of the cuisine.
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, most
kinds
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 of problems
which
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 we have lots of
decisions
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 do not play an important role in our daily life and we only have
seldom
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decisions
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 about the important issue.
On the other hand
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, we only have several
choices
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 when we have to consider different abundant
factors
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.Taking job finding for
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,
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first
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 we need to think about what
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 of
job
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the job
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 we can do and
also
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 the major what I study in the university, even the salary is an essential factor we need to think over.
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, we only have
few
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decisions
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 after lots of consideration.So we do not have enough
choices
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 because we need to premeditate different types of situations and
factors
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 on the significant problems. To summarize, I agree we have lots of different
kinds
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 of
decisions
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 in daily life
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 the food or some not essential things.
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, we only have rare
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 when we face
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significant
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 which have excessive
factors
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 that need to consider.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • decision fatigue
  • myriad
  • dissatisfaction
  • regret
  • paralysis of action
  • empowers
  • preferences
  • innovation
  • competitiveness
  • fosters
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