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You and some friends ate a meal at restaurant to celebrate a special occasion , and you very pleased with the food and services . Write a letter to the restaurant manager .

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to convey my heartfelt appreciation for the
top quality
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restaurant
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's Services.
Last
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 week, I visited your
restaurant
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 'Sheetal Banquet' located at Erin Mills Road, with my friends to celebrate my birthday. We enjoyed
a
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it a
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lot there, and it was an excellent evening for all of us. I would like to take
this
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 opportunity to mention
about
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apply
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food quality. We ordered a three-meal course
;
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,
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 ranging from starter, main meal, and dessert, the taste was not compromised anywhere. Apart from that, the staff was very polite, cooperative, and attentive to
customer's
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customers'
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 queries. I would really praise them for their hard work and dedication towards their work.
Furthermore
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, when it comes to
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restaurant's
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the restaurant's
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 atmosphere, that was
also
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 very clean and hygienic. All the staff had worn head caps to cover their head hairs, and gloves
in
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on
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hands
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their hands
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. I could find
sanitizers
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sanitisers
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 at all tables.
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,
arrangement
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the arrangement
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 of private cabins for group gatherings was
also
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 commandable.
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, I would like to give one suggestion that
probably would
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would probably
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 enhance the aura of your
restaurant
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. I suggest playing some light music in the
restaurant
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. It will give more positive vibes to the
restaurant
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's atmosphere.
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, people would feel more relaxed and comfortable. Once again, thanks for making our small celebration special because of your incredible
restaurant
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's services. Yours faithfully, Kanwalpreet Kaur

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coherence and cohesion
Try to break paragraphs into smaller sections for easier reading.
task achievement
Make sure to clearly state the purpose of your letter in the first sentence.
positive feedback
Your use of polite language shows great respect and creates a positive tone.
positive feedback
You provided specific examples to support your points, which is very effective.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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