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Government should close companies that produce toxic waste materials without their own waste treatments facility in order to protect the environment. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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Toxic materials are an ongoing problem for the
environment
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. There were allegations from the government to shut down businesses in order to reduce the environmental damages. I wholeheartedly agree.
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environment
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.
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 main reason why climate change is getting worse, Is because of the toxic materials. Every year a variety of products get published on the market.
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, let's suppose a company released a new product with features that aren't friendly to the
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,
thus
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 It might damage the oxygen, so
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 a harmful material that shouldn't get published. Citizens won't have a healthy life with these harmful factors. Ultimately,
companies
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 must reconsider their production growth. Another key factor is that business owners are careless about the fact that they are harmful.
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, they continue to work on creating more toxic products. The authority should take action and tax
companies
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 to avoid
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potential damage.
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, forcing taxes on business owners can reduce a significant amount of production.
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, if the government forced high taxes on
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 they
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 stop producing materials that are harmful to the world. In the long run, they will be able to protect the
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 if they
stopped
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 production. In conclusion, I believe governments must take action against the
companies
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 who are responsible for the damages. To be more precise, If the damages
continued
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 to happen, the
authority
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 should shut down the
companies
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 because there is no other alternative to prevent
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