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Some believe that money for education should mainly be spent on better computers while others believe it would be better spent on teachers. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Education
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 is an important asset for everyone. While
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 claim that spending
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 should be more on computers for
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 and others claim that it would be best to spend on human resources. In my opinion, spending
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 more on computers will provide more flexibility in learning and availability of resources as well as allow people to learn anywhere they are. Practical knowledge is always mandatory for all people. Humans are well trained in practical training than computers, As well as the learner easily grasps a lesson taught by the teachers.
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, my cousin received a high-grade rank in the chemistry laboratory during his schooling and remembered his tutor for teaching in an understandable format.
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, human interaction is always essential in the
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 department. During classroom training, teachers will understand every student's mindset and give an assignment based on their capabilities. There are numerous positive impacts of investing
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 in tutors who provide practical knowledge and mental strength to understand the lessons. On other hand, technology has an enormous resource for educating people. the
computer
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 provides more flexibility and comfortability to learn more than expected.
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, when we try to search for some research paper on a
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, it will give us multiple options based on our search.
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, it helps everyone to learn from anywhere. It is not always mandatory to be at school to learn.it gives more expandability to educate as well as spend more time with a family.
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 helps
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human with greater expandability on resources and learn from home. To conclude, spending
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 on
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 is always improvise society to the
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 spending on teacher for
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 is good in terms of gaining knowledge and understanding of the human mindset but
computer
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 provides more flexibility than a human being.
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