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Some people believe that electronic calculators should not be allowed in school until after the pupils have mastered mental arithmetic. Others believe that calculators save pupils time, especially with complicated calculations. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

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Advancements in technology have changed the way we approach learning in school, but there has been a hot debate on the use of electronic
calculators
 in school, some say that because of the dependency
calculators
 can create on young
pupils
, it should be banned. As for others, because of the benefits of saving time, especially with complex calculations,
calculators
 should continue to be used. As for myself, I will
first
 look at both sides and give ways we can approach
this
 situation.
First
, let’s look at the negatives of
calculators
. The main and most significant impact is that school children become too dependent on
calculators
 and become lazy, as
such
 weakening their thinking and mathematical skills.
As a result
,
calculators
 can be a form of cheating, as young schoolchildren haven’t fully developed their mental arithmetic.
Next
, let’s look at the good side of
calculators
. Because of saving time,
calculators
 can help them get past the easy questions and have more time doing the harder questions that
calculators
 can’t solve until the problem has been simplified by
pupils
, and
thus
 strengthen their logical skills
instead
 of the opposites.
Furthermore
,
calculators
 can be a great form for
pupils
 to experiment with math or apply them to other subjects. In conclusion,
this
 argument has been thoroughly discussed in
this
 essay and I think the best way we can settle down the argument is not to ban
calculators
,
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 but to limit usage for young
pupils
,
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 because
calculators
 can be a great form to introduce students to technology. Hopefully,
this
 situation will not be a problem anymore if more people and schools now understand the use of electronic
calculators
.
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