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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss views and give your own opinion.

#people #professionals #doctors #engineers #work #country
Pakistan is the
country
 in which the literacy rate is 58 per cent
according to
 the 2022 survey. the population of
this
country
 is 20 million and it is a developing
country
 which needs more
professionals
 to be a strong empowering nation and to build the good economy of the
country
. I strongly encourage the
professionals
 to stay in the homeland and serve the
country
 to help
in
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.
professionals
 are an asset to the
country
 which can help the netizens
as well as
 they can contribute to the
country
's economy by generating
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foreign money by attracting
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foreigners through their skills,by
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person
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of
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other countries come and facilitate through their skills and bring foreign money into the
country
. nowadays
professionals
 prefer to go out of the
country
 and settle abroad and serve the English people to make good money for
just
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themselves they
forgot
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 how their
country
help
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them to be
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good
professional
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 and
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to
this
 point.
This
 is the sad reality of Pakistan and in my ,opinion there is a huge role
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professionals
 in developing countries empowerment,they stay in their homeland serve them in
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thick and thin time and always think selflessly so now we all can see the progress of those countries which suffer together and rise like China and Japan. Once we start thinking selflessly we begin to rise day by day and one day will become the strongest nation
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 the world which is not impossible just needs some motivation and patriotic love.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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