Many people fell it is waste of money to try to save endangered animal species , for example the tiger or blue whale . To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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they feel that saving wild

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why it is important to save

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many quality things to people for

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species

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part of society

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keeping them safe is more necessary.

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different things. For

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teeth, skins and bones of

animals

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, some individuals are disappearing dramatically

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humans keep them

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cages and used them for making

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responsibility to keeping save them

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investing

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animals

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humans used them for their happiness

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giving them fresh air and soil

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 6.0

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endangered species
biodiversity
intrinsic value
existential threat
ecosystem
conservation
economic benefits
funding allocation
competing needs

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