People in cities often do not interact with their neighbors and this is harming communities. What are the possible causes and solutions?
The mankind
has needed Correct article usage
Mankind
generating
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to generate
energy
for Correct article usage
an easer
easer
life than Correct your spelling
easier
preceding
ages. Especially, after the industrial revolution, electronic devices provide Change preposition
in preceding
to
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apply
humanity
beneficial
opportunities Change preposition
with beneficial
such
as car
, Fix the agreement mistake
cars
telephone
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telephones
and
, tv. Correct word choice
apply
On the other hand
, when the factories produce these things, they cause many harmful effects on nature because of using fossil fuels
. This
circumstance can be called “the cost of comfortable life”. Nowadays, particularly european
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European
countries
struggle alteration
their method of Change preposition
to alteration
energy
generating distinguishingly renewable energy
sources
like wind. Although
some countries
insist using
fossil Change preposition
on using
fuels
, many researches
show that retainable Change the wording
types of research
pieces of research
kinds of research
energy
sources
submit more habitable environment. In fact, these sources
that produce energy
, have two main benefits: maintainability and clean air
.
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with, Wrong verb form
Beginning
humanity
has been using products of oil since antiquity. Consumption of these outputs increased unprecedentedly after the industrial age and mankind faced
with probability Add a missing verb
was faced
depletion
of Change preposition
of depletion
sources
that
cited above. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Therefore
, especially developed countries
started the examinations that they tried overcaming
Correct your spelling
overcoming
energy
problem. Finally
, they found two solution
for generating Change to a plural noun
solutions
the
Correct article usage
apply
energy
. One of them was nuclear power
which had many danger
for human life. Fix the agreement mistake
dangers
Other
, Correct pronoun usage
Another
also
most acceptable, option
was renewable Add an article
the option
an option
energy
that
means benefiting sun or wind Correct pronoun usage
which
power
. To illustrate, Germany has decreased consumption
of fossil Correct pronoun usage
its consumption
fuels
as well using
nuclear Correct word choice
as using
power
and has focused developing
clear Change preposition
on developing
power
systems like wind farms and solar panels. In the same way, several developed countries
have tendency
Correct article usage
a tendency
progress
the maintainable Fix the infinitive
to progress
energy
framework due to unlimited using opportunities of these sources
.
Another benefit of using renewable energy
sources
is generating power
without harming to
nature. Consumption of fossil Change preposition
apply
fuels
show
that using Change the verb form
shows
these kind
of Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
sources
cause air
pollution. In contrast
, producing power
with renewable energy
systems aid to
Change preposition
apply
humanity
for
keeping clear the Change preposition
in
air
. For instance
, many country
which Change to a plural noun
countries
are
realized Change the verb form
is
harmful
effects of using fossil Correct article usage
the harmful
fuels
,
made Remove the comma
apply
an
treaty called Change the article
a
Paris
Climate Agreement that aims decreasing Correct article usage
the Paris
level
of greenhouse gas which is related to using fossil Correct article usage
the level
fuels
. Thus
, one can conclude that renewable energy
can be only
solution for Add an article
the only
prevention
of Correct article usage
the prevention
air
pollution.
To conclude, using renewable energy
can help to
Change preposition
apply
humanity
for
two main aspects that Change preposition
in
involves
retainability and avoiding pollution. In spite of useful opportunities, establishing farms that generate Change the verb form
involve
clear
Correct your spelling
clean
energy
, necessitate
large budges. Correct subject-verb agreement
necessitates
Nevertheless
, it seems that mankind should choose clear power
sources
for future generations rather than think merely today
.Change preposition
about today
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