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The best way to improve standards in education is to ensure that class sizes are small. Do you agree or disagree.

#standards #education #class #sizes
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Many suggestions have been made to achieve better results with respect to
education
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, yet only a few seem to work. Some argue that
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 quality can be improved by keeping the
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size
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 small.
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 I think
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 measure is sure to help raise the quality of
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, it is not without its downsides. To start,
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 should consider some possible drawbacks to holding a
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 for a small number of
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 immediate concern is the costs of
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. Once the
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size
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 shrinks, each remaining individual student should pay extra to make up for the cost that would
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 be split among many other
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.
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 can particularly be problematic in areas where school funding is limited like private schools.
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 other possible outcome is the shift in student personality.
Students
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 learning in relatively small groups of 3 to 5 tend to develop less social behaviour and do not get many chances to learn to work as a team:
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 cannot be an exemplary citizen if they are not a good team player. Having said that, I support small
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 sizes to attain better standards in
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. The first reason for
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 has to do with longer student-teacher interaction. Admittedly, once the
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size
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 is down to, say 5, the teacher is able to give each student more of his/her time and attention.
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 gives the teacher plenty of time to discuss
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 content like homework and a new chapter for the day and a chance to find out more about their
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. More than just discussing assignments, time saved from not having to teach an oversized
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 can be used to do additional classroom activities to
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 hammer home concepts learnt in the
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. Considering both these benefits, a small
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size
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 is generally the more preferable, should
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wishes
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 to boost
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 quality. In conclusion,
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 there are some problems associated with downsizing in the classroom, I am of the view that it is an advisable course of action as far as improving standards in
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task response
Ensure that the arguments are supported with specific and relevant examples.
coherence and cohesion
Improve the use of cohesive devices to create smoother transitions between ideas and paragraphs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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