People today do not feel safe either at home or when they are out. What are the causes? What are the solutions?
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Nowadays
people
worry about do tthey
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they
safe
or not when they are at home or when they go outside. From my point of view, the reason Add a missing verb
are safe
of
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for
this
situation have
two Unnecessary verb
apply
reason
. On Change to a plural noun
reasons
one
hand, the Correct article usage
the one
news
on TV
program, Add an article
the TV
a TV
news paper
or anywhere always Correct your spelling
newspaper
report
the bad Change the verb form
reports
news
of
. Change preposition
apply
On the other hand
, the amount of own vehice
increase. Correct your spelling
vehicle
Moreover
, some of soution
can solve these problems Correct your spelling
solution
it
will Correct pronoun usage
apply
discuss
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be discussed
at
the third paragraphs
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First,
most of
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apply
people
read news
to get the newest information. But they often report the Add an article
the news
news
about Add an article
the accident
accident
, it cause Fix the agreement mistake
accidents
people
feel
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to feel
neversously
. Correct your spelling
nervously
For instance
, when the
flight Correct article usage
a
accident
occur
, the Change the verb form
occurs
news
about this
event must be the hottest news
for a whie
. It makes Correct your spelling
while
peope
think taking Correct your spelling
people
airplane
is dangerous. Add an article
an airplane
However
, actually air
plane is the safest transport. By the same token, maybe Correct your spelling
a
the
public Correct article usage
apply
secruity
is Correct your spelling
security
well
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good
at
one country but the media reveal Change preposition
in
the
some Remove the article
apply
crime
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criminal
event
frequently. The residents Fix the agreement mistake
events
at
that country Change preposition
of
aware
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are aware
of
the place Change preposition
that
their
Correct pronoun usage
they
leave
is not safe. Correct your spelling
live
Secondly
, the car ownersip
increase sharply. The amount Correct your spelling
ownership
owners
vehicle
on Change preposition
of vehicle
road
plus. The incidence of car Correct article usage
the road
accident
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accidents
climb
. I prompt Wrong verb form
has climbed
people
feel
anxious Add the particle
to feel
of
their own safe.
From Change the preposition
about
m
perspective, Correct your spelling
my
their
are some ways to deal Replace the word
there
the
problem. I think the media newscorp can upload more Change preposition
with the
possitive
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positive
news
, like the instrument of safe
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safety
upgrade
or Fix the agreement mistake
upgrades
government
regulations the new policy for people
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people's
safe
. Replace the word
safety
Besides
, when the news
which
is Correct pronoun usage
apply
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a report
the report
report
about Wrong verb form
reported
transport
crash or crime, it Correct article usage
a transport
need
to show the Change the verb form
needs
recommend
solution Wrong verb form
recommended
people
can help themself to palliatium
their feel of afraid. Correct your spelling
palliation
In addition
, government
can encourage peopoe
to take public transportation. It is more safe and environmentally friendly. And Correct your spelling
people
government
can collect more fuel tax or car owner tax to reduce amount
of cars which drive on the street. If the quantity of vehicle on the road decrease, the traffic will be more smooth so the traffic Add an article
the amount
accident
chances drop
In conclusion, it is various reasons make people
feel stay
at home or outside is dangerous. I think Wrong verb form
that staying
government
can do the policy I have Correct article usage
the government
write
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written
at
the third paragraph to solve the problemChange preposition
in
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task response
The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The main points are not well-connected, and the supporting examples are not relevant or specific enough. The essay does not fully address all parts of the task. The reasons for people feeling unsafe are vaguely mentioned, and the solutions lack depth and coherence.
coherence cohesion
There is limited logical structure in the essay. The ideas are presented in a disorganized manner, and the lack of clear introduction and conclusion affects the overall coherence. The essay needs better paragraph development and coherence between ideas.
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