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Some people say that the bicycles are a good, modern means of transportation. Other say riding a bicycle has clear disadvantages. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion.

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Many people consider that there are
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 of benefits
in
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 riding a
bicycle
 while others think that there are many drawbacks. In my view, I think that there are more pros
cons
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 .
Firstly
,
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bicycle
 and
secondly
, the detrimental effects of
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bicycle
 riding.
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, on the one
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 the main advantage of using a
bicycle
 as your main mode of transport in the cities is that it
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it
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 very good exercise it is known to be a great
way
 to burn calories, as well as toning your muscles.
This
way
 of
traveling
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 can not only be environmentally friendly but help people to maintain a healthy lifestyle in order to have consistent exercise during the day.
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 an article by Healthy magazine in 2020 revealed that daily
bicycle
 riding is one of the ways healthy trainers promote shedding excess pounds.
Secondly
,
on the other hand
, the primary disadvantage of cycling is that it can be dangerous at times .Cyclists often forget to use protective garments that can shield them during unfortunate accidents and
as a result
, they receive severe injuries,since Cyclists can easily make their
way
 through busy streets they are more prone to causing road accidents because some drivers may not see them.In my opinion, I believe that riding a
bicycle
 has its own set of benefits,owning a
bicycle
 can help protect
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the
tha
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the
 environment for there are no carbon emissions produced when riding it .Bicycles offer an environmentally friendly
way
 of getting around. In conclusion,
bicycle
 riding definitely has its advantages.Many people own a
bicycle
 for
this
 is an effective
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, one's health and at the same time can assist in protecting the environment.
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