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Which one you think more influence on people from the followings – The knowledge gained from experience or the knowledge gained from books

#influence #people #followings #books
Every individual has
their
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various way of learning, some Persons can be perfect in learning through
experience
 and,
number
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 of groups can acquire talent through
books
. Both have
there
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 benefits, I will say that
knowledge
acquire
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 from
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the book
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book
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 is more than
the
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one from
experience
.
Knowledge
 is power regardless of how is been acquired .
first
, a lot of talents are gotten from
book
 reading ,
for instance
 , in
healthcare
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 institution, quite a number of their curriculum leads to practicals after the
theoritical
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theoretical
 aspect , for a doctor or a nurse to carry out a procedure she
must have
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study
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 guide for every procedure. A lot of
books
has
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 exposed people
into
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 gaining more
knowledge
 in every division. There is a novel by Ben Carson
which
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titled 'Taking the risk'
this
 Novel has inspired a lot of people in knowing what risk is all about in life not just working and earning money,
This
 Novel taught about how one can achieve his or her aspiration regardless of the obstacles .
Furthermore
, students can only explore and expand
knowledge
 by reading, A news reporter cannot get properly
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equipped
equiped
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equipped
 without gaining
knowledge
 from internet reading and
books
 .
Also
,
knowledge
 grounded
from
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the book
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book
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books
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 is the
first
 step everyone takes before experimenting .
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example
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 proper grounding of a child having various
books
 while in school will expose the child
into
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 knowing more, lots of philosophers did not just achieve their potential by
experience
 , lots of
knowledge
 was acquired by studying different handouts. Most
scientist
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scientists
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 and technologist was been taught by teachers who have gained wisdom from
books
 . Moreso
experience
 has to
due
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 with your natural talent and for one to perfect on it proper education is involved. There is always a saying ...
Experience
 is the best teacher notwithstanding
to
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this
 statement
knowledge
 from
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a book
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book
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books
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 comes
first
 before
the
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experience
 because you can only
experience
 what you know. In all,
knowledge
 from
book
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books
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 influences people more than
experience
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