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Overpopulation of urban area has lead to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that the governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

#overpopulation #area #two #ones #governments #individuals
For the
last
 few
decades
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 it is indeed true that more
people
 are interested in living
cities
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in cities
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 rather than rural
areas
.
This
 scenario can be attributed to urbanisation.
Thus
 it is obvious that most
of
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urban
areas
 are densely populated
in
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nowadays. It can certainly cause detrimental effects on
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society.
Therefore
 it must be addressed immediately.
Rapid
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The rapid
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 surge in the population in developed
areas
 can create
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numerous
neumerous
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numerous
 issues.
Firstly
,
lack
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the lack
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 of sufficient job opportunities
are
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is
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 a serious issue caused by
the
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overpopulation.
As a
result
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 most
of
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the
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skilled and unskilled labours do not get a job based on their qualifications.
Hence
, their quality of life and family life has become devastated.
Secondly
, because of
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urbanisation
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 most
cities
 have been facing another problem
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pollution. When compared to rural
areas
 most of the
cities
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city's
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 air,water and soil are highly contaminated recently. Excessive vehicles and poor waste disposal
makes
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earth
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the earth
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 more and more polluted every day.
On the other hand
,
however
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 it can certainly be reduced by necessary steps. There
are
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 plenty of
way
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ways
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 in which
this
 problem can be solved. Government can implement several solutions to solve the issue.
First
, authorities should embark
new
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on new
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 job facilities in developing
areas
hence
people
 in the
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countryside
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country side
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countryside
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 can stay
their
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in their
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 hometown.
Second
,increase
more
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public transport
instead
 of private vehicles to reduce
the
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air pollution and enhance public awareness and encourage
people
 to promote recycling procedures can decline air and water contamination. To conclude, overpopulation in
cities
 can cause
dramatic
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 impact on
earth
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the earth
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 and
people
 it is indeed an alarming situation and it must be addressed as soon as possible.
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