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Some people believe that global warming is today’s most pressing environmental problem. At the same time, some consider deforestation to have the most devastating impact on the world. Discuss both views and give your opinion on the same.

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Of late, the question of which poses a greater danger to our survival from global warming and
deforestation
 forms the backbone of many conflicts in a number of circles. While some
people
 believe that the effect of global warming, and extreme weather conditions, are more far-reaching and,
therefore
, more concerning, some others are of the opinion that the rapid depletion of our forest cover caused by
deforestation
 leads to more serious consequences like soil erosion, air pollution, and loss of habitat. In my opinion, the impact of
deforestation
 is more immediate and is,
therefore
, to be taken relatively more seriously.
Firstly
, global warming gives birth to extreme weather conditions like scorching hot summers, incredibly heavy rainfalls, and brutally cold winters. On average, the Earth’s temperature is rising by 1.5 and falling by 2.2 degrees Celsius in summers and winters, respectively. In
this
 regard, while
deforestation
 only impacts the local areas where the forest cover is reduced, global warming
also
 impacts regions like Antarctica, where the problem of
deforestation
 is not as grave. So, many
people
 consider global warming to be the paramount concern when it comes to the survival of human life.
In contrast
 to the former viewpoint, some
people
 strongly believe that
deforestation
 is the more immediate cause of concern because of the shorter gestation period. We can see its repercussions like soil erosion, loss of wildlife, increase in cO2, and droughts, among other problems. Recently news showed that after the state government of a metropolitan area ordered to cut down trees to procure more land to build complexes,
as a result
, wild animals were seen roaming the streets. As if
this
 wasn’t enough, the amount of carbon dioxide rose, and the area was flooded by the monsoon soon after. To recapitulate, I believe that desertification is more concerning than global warming because of its immediate impact on the local environment, and the
people
 and government need to work in tandem to curb
this
 practice in their district.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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