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Some people think studying on campus is the most effective way to learn while others believe that studying online is more effective, Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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During the pandemic, studying online has become spread among the students and lectures.
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, some people believe that studying on campus is the most effective way to learn rather than studying online. In
this
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both
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of
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 the studying system.
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Firstly
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,
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Covid-19
force
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 all of the students and teachers not to go to school.
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, they must stay at home if they haven't
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 a vaccine. Surprisingly,
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advance
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 technology helps us to
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this
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 meeting online. The
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author
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 gives the same curriculum with
same
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 duration of
study
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the study
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,
additionaly
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additionally
, they give the homework too.
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, my brother who continued his study
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in
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 college
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years
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,
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still can have a good score even though he studying online.
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, there are
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 of
problem
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problems
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from
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online
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the online
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meeting
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meetings
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.
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, it's not effective due to the differences
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 the atmosphere and pressure from the lectures.
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 the pupils can have the same result in
score
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a score
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, the
procces
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process
 to get that score seems so different.
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, the lectures reduce their standard of scores
such
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,
on campus
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on-campus
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 we can find the tools to do the practice,
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, we can't find
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in
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at
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 our home.
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 the scores are the same, the quality of the college students will be different.
Campus
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 is the place to have a new
habit
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habits
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,
such
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 as communication
skills
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 and working
skills
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 which it can't find while studying online. In conclusion,
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studying online has become the solution
as a result
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 of
pandemic
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the pandemic
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. In spite of the children
have
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having
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a good scores
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a good score
good scores
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,
lack
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a lack
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 of
skills
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such
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 as communications
skills
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 and
practices
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practice
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skills
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 will impact the student's future.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • online education
  • flexibility
  • accessibility
  • enhancing learning experiences
  • online platforms
  • self-discipline
  • motivation
  • structured environments
  • democratize education
  • broader audience
  • social interaction
  • internet connectivity
  • screen fatigue
  • on-campus experiences
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