Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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new era, many working-class people immerse themselves so much into
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, that they are left with almost no
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for any recreational or personal activity. In my opinion,
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lifestyle brings them
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of
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like poor mental
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, relationship issues, inefficient
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performance, and various
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problems
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. In
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essay, I will briefly explain all of these disadvantages.
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, when we devote all of our
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to
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, we devoid ourselves
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any
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to rejuvenate our
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, if keep on repeating
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daily pattern, we start to suffer from mental illnesses like anger, stress, and other psychological disorders.
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, when I started my career in 2012, I begin to
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around the clock, giving myself no
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for recreational activities, and
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, I suffered from Insomnia.
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, as our minds are not in their optimum
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because of overworking, it
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results in poor performance at
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, all in all, it results even negatively for the purpose for which we were sacrificing all of our
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for
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, many companies are now forcing their employees to finish their
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and leave their offices on
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; and they are seeing tremendous advantages of
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to say that
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working for extended hours leaves one with no
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to spend with family;
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, creates relationship
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, these days, divorce rates are skyrocketing, and
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is observed mainly in those couples, who are giving very little
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to each other, mainly due to giving their whole
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to
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, as
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modern people are giving very little
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to any physical activities due to overworking,
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issues like obesity,
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and cardio-vascular
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cardio-vascular
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cardiovascular
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diseases are on the rise. Personally, many of my family members, even in their middle age, have suffered heart attacks, as they have no
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for exercise. In conclusion, the internal drive to career growth is so strong in most of today's working class,
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neglect the long-term harmful effects like hampered
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performance, family issues, poor
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, and mental
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problems
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. To sum it up, people should devote only the required amount of
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to
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, so that they have plenty of
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to give to their families, recreation, physical exercises, and mental rejuvenation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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